Challenge
This is a collaboration prompt. Offer up a piece (poem or flash fiction) to be revised by another person on prose. (you may tag your preferred revisers). I want to see both the original and the revised version(s)! (is this confusing? okay, first time I am posting a prompt here)
Collab Challenge Revision
Mutilate and enhance at will. (feel free to change up to 90% of the text and add more. Open to all.)
Henrietta fondled Hilda's ear lovingly.
Hilda let out a carefree squeal,
startling herself to all-fours.
Suddenly, our gazes met,
and she began to crawl toward me.
Original (by @EstherFlowers1):
Henrietta fondled Hilda's ear lovingly.
Hilda let out an appreciative fart,
startling herself to all-fours.